- Having students getting used to being babied in school makes them a lot more sensitive to certain topics and situations. In “The Coddling” it states, “Schools may be training students in thinking styles that will damage their careers and friendships, along with their mental health.” (Lukianoff). This quote shows how schools have been training their students to think in a different way that makes them more sensitive to most topics and tasks that come up not only in school but in their everyday lives.
Allowing students to get used to being babied in school, drives them to become a lot more sensitive to certain topics and situations. In “The Coddling”, authors Lukianoff and Haidt believe that, “Schools may be training students in thinking styles that will damage their careers and friendships, along with their mental health.” (Lukianoff). This quote shows how schools have been teaching students to think in a different way that makes them more sensitive to most topics and tasks that not only come up in school but in their everyday lives.
In this first quote I changed the first sentence before the quote to work as a better introduction to the quote. I also changed the words before the quote from “In “The Coddling” it states” to “In “The Coddling”, authors Lukianoff and Haidt believe that”. I changed it to this because for just about all my quotes all I said was “it states” over and over again, that seems very repetitive so I wanted to switch it up to sound better. I also changed a few words in the sentence after the quote to sound better and make more sense. I think these changes improve my quote because it helps the quote make more sense to the reader and sound more interesting.
2. Dweck believes that we should talk to students in a different way that could change their mindsets and boost their confidence. In Dweck’s TED Talk she states, “I heard about a high school in Chicago where students had to pass a certain number of courses to graduate, and if they didn’t pass a course, they got the grade “Not Yet”. A I thought that was fantastic,” (Dweck). As this high school in Chicago did, Dweck thinks all schools should grade students with a simple “Yet” or “Not Yet” rather than allowing students to have an actual letter grade.
Dweck believes that we should talk to students in a different way that could help change their mindsets and boost their confidence. In Dweck’s TED Talk she points out that she, “Heard about a high school in Chicago where students had to pass a certain number of courses to graduate, and if they didn’t pass a course, they got the grade “Not Yet”. A I thought that was fantastic,” (Dweck). As the high school in Chicago did, Dweck thinks all schools should grade students with a simple “Yet” or “Not Yet”, rather than allowing students to see an actual letter grade.
In this quote I changed the words before the quote from “In Dweck’s TED Talk she states” to “In Dweck’s TED Talk she points out that she”. I changed it to this because I think saying “In Dweck’s TED Talk she points out that she” serves as a good introduction to the quote and allows for better understanding. I think this change improves my quote because beginning my quote with “she points out that she” allows the reader to know where I’m going with the quote. Rather than just writing what Dweck stated, I’m showing the reader that she pointed out this example of a school that uses the “Yet” and “Not Yet” to support her ideas on why we should use it.
3. While a “Yet” or “Not Yet” grade could benefit a student during school, it may hurt them in the long run. In Dweck’s TED Talk she states, “But praising the process that kids engage in, their effort, their strategies, their focus, their perseverance, their improvement.” (Dweck). Dweck believes that students should be rewarded and praised just for putting in effort and engaging in their work, rather than being praised for doing their work correctly, and putting in the time to learn and practice the material.
While a “Yet” or “Not Yet” grade could benefit a student during school, it may hurt them in the long run. In Dweck’s TED Talk she claims that, “praising the process that kids engage in, their effort, their strategies, their focus, their perseverance, their improvement. This process [of] praise creates kids who are hardy and resilient.” (Dweck). Dweck believes that students should be rewarded and praised just for putting in effort and engaging in their work, rather than being praised for doing their work correctly, and putting in time to learn and practice the material.
In this last quote I changed the introduction to the quote from “In Dweck’s TED Talk she states” to “In Dweck’s TED Talk she claims that”. I made this change because, once again, I felt that the “it states” was very repetitive and may cause my reader to lose interest. I also took out “But” in the beginning of the quote to help it make more sense, along with adding another sentence to the end of the quote. I added more to the end of the quote because I feel like what I had for the quote originally didn’t make much sense, especially if someone were reading it who doesn’t know all of dweck’s ideas. I also added brackets to a word in the quote to help it make more sense to the reader. I think these changes improve my quote because my original writing sounded vague and could be seen as confusing to some readers.
